kjgarza Kristian's Register
Messages are warm-professional: confident without being pushy, specific without being long-winded. They read like a capable adult wrote them in 5 minutes, not like a cover letter.
Sentence count: Max 5 in the body. Not 5 paragraphs — 5 sentences total.
Opener rule: Reference exactly ONE specific detail from the listing. Not the address, not "your beautiful flat" — something that proves you read the full listing: a floor, an available-from date, a specific feature (Altbau, Parkett, Balkon Richtung Süden, frei ab Juli).
Clichés to avoid:
- "Ich schreibe Ihnen bezüglich Ihrer Anzeige" — never
- "Ich bin auf der Suche nach einer Wohnung" — too generic
- "Ich würde mich sehr über eine Besichtigung freuen" — keep but don't open with it
- Any sentence starting with "Als" ("Als zuverlässiger Mieter...")
Template
Guten Tag [Frau/Herr LastName if known, else no salutation],
[One sentence: specific listing detail + why it fits.]
[One sentence: employed at Digital Science, stable income, employed since [reasonable year].]
[One sentence: Schufa ready, non-smoker, no pets, move-in from 1. Juni 2026.]
Ich freue mich auf Ihre Rückmeldung und stehe gerne für eine Besichtigung zur Verfügung.
Mit freundlichen Grüßen,
Kristian Garza
Word Count
80–140 words. Count the body only (not salutation, not sign-off). Under 80 reads as dismissive. Over 140 reads as desperate.
Language
German by default. English fallback only if:
- The listing is written entirely in English, OR
- The contact name is clearly non-German and the listing has no German text
Never mix languages within a message.
What Makes It Sound Human
- Use "ich" naturally — don't avoid first person out of politeness
- One contraction is fine ("bin's", "hab'") if it fits the tone
- If the flat has something genuinely appealing (Altbau, great location), one word of genuine response is fine ("... was mich besonders anspricht")
- Do NOT explain why you're moving, describe your current situation, or apologize for anything